Writing Task 1: The Basics
Step 3: Rewrite the story from Step 2, but combine some of the sentences using "Subordination".
(See p 7 & p 9 in the BASICs Handout.)
You may add new information to make your complex sentences.
You can use "simple sentences" & "compound sentences" & "complex sentences" on this page.
Title:Ayaka have Pandorum too
1. After we started, I would like to let you know the main character who is Ayaka, and she is from Japanese.
2. She lives in Hokkaido since she was bron on 1986, when she was 18 years old and she started studied Hokkaido University.
3. She doesn’t has good relationship in the adolecence, for she has pessimistic notion and melancholy, even though she saw the doctor many times.
4. While she has part-time job and working in the bookstore, she starting earn her tuition fee.
5. She works harder than other people, yet she can't control her emotion,when she strated feel pressure.
6. After she read the book, she start interested in reading, yet she hates to discuss with people,.
7. Her favorite book is not only “I have Pandorum too”, but also have other books, by the time she commenced practise her writing and thinking how to be a good writer .
8. "I have Pandorum too", the book describe the one person has melancholy and blue.
9. The person is woman and her name is Pandorum.
10. Pandorum also has pessimistic notion, because she has bad (inborn) character.
11. Her characteristic just like Ayaka.
12. One of the event in the book.
13. She feel people doesn’t care her in her life since she feel her family doesn’t like her, nor her friend.
14. She have strong idea in her mind, so her brin just like a box.
15. Whenever she opened it,she always get in troble and sadness, because she can't bear her curiously.
16.She eternally not only think who am I? but also think where am I? How long I slept? What I am doing? Why I am in here?
17. These messages around in her mind for a long time.
18. In one day.
19. She meet the preacher.
20. The preacher told her about either God or Jesus since she starts go to church everyday.
21. After day by day, she was recovered and happiness.
22. Ayaka has a dream although she never do that.
23. She likes travel to Canada, for she didn't travel to any country.
24. Before she go to Canada and study English, she publiched three novel and earned her first thirty-hundred dollars.
25. She meets the guy and his name is Jack, when she arrived Canada.
26. Jack live in the Vancouver which city is the most beautiful from Canada, but he didn't like here, because it is too cold.
27. Jack and Ayaka studies in the same University, but they studies different major.
28. Jack's major is psychology and Ayaka's major is English language.
29. They studies together and fall in love.
30. Jack become aware of Ayaka have some problem about melancholy when they started association.
31. He try to remedy her sickness, because he love her.
32. He made it and Ayaka is a health people now.
33. She successed, so they plan to married.
34. As soon as possible, Ayaka want to go to Japan to tell her parents about her story and give her surprise, but her parents didn't accept the married.
35. Ayaka go back to Canada and she didn't change her idea.
36. Jack's friend is Maria who is a Canadian women.
37. Bothe Jack and Maria are good friend of Ayaka.
38. Maria and her all frieds helped Ayaka and Jack since they planed marry.
39. Ayaka mother accept the married and her mother will attend the wedding, but her father won't.
40. Ayaka and Jack have a married.
41. The end.
Step 3: Rewrite the story from Step 2, but combine some of the sentences using "Subordination".
(See p 7 & p 9 in the BASICs Handout.)
You may add new information to make your complex sentences.
You can use "simple sentences" & "compound sentences" & "complex sentences" on this page.
Title:Ayaka have Pandorum too
1. After we started, I would like to let you know the main character who is Ayaka, and she is from Japanese.
2. She lives in Hokkaido since she was bron on 1986, when she was 18 years old and she started studied Hokkaido University.
3. She doesn’t has good relationship in the adolecence, for she has pessimistic notion and melancholy, even though she saw the doctor many times.
4. While she has part-time job and working in the bookstore, she starting earn her tuition fee.
5. She works harder than other people, yet she can't control her emotion,when she strated feel pressure.
6. After she read the book, she start interested in reading, yet she hates to discuss with people,.
7. Her favorite book is not only “I have Pandorum too”, but also have other books, by the time she commenced practise her writing and thinking how to be a good writer .
8. "I have Pandorum too", the book describe the one person has melancholy and blue.
9. The person is woman and her name is Pandorum.
10. Pandorum also has pessimistic notion, because she has bad (inborn) character.
11. Her characteristic just like Ayaka.
12. One of the event in the book.
13. She feel people doesn’t care her in her life since she feel her family doesn’t like her, nor her friend.
14. She have strong idea in her mind, so her brin just like a box.
15. Whenever she opened it,she always get in troble and sadness, because she can't bear her curiously.
16.She eternally not only think who am I? but also think where am I? How long I slept? What I am doing? Why I am in here?
17. These messages around in her mind for a long time.
18. In one day.
19. She meet the preacher.
20. The preacher told her about either God or Jesus since she starts go to church everyday.
21. After day by day, she was recovered and happiness.
22. Ayaka has a dream although she never do that.
23. She likes travel to Canada, for she didn't travel to any country.
24. Before she go to Canada and study English, she publiched three novel and earned her first thirty-hundred dollars.
25. She meets the guy and his name is Jack, when she arrived Canada.
26. Jack live in the Vancouver which city is the most beautiful from Canada, but he didn't like here, because it is too cold.
27. Jack and Ayaka studies in the same University, but they studies different major.
28. Jack's major is psychology and Ayaka's major is English language.
29. They studies together and fall in love.
30. Jack become aware of Ayaka have some problem about melancholy when they started association.
31. He try to remedy her sickness, because he love her.
32. He made it and Ayaka is a health people now.
33. She successed, so they plan to married.
34. As soon as possible, Ayaka want to go to Japan to tell her parents about her story and give her surprise, but her parents didn't accept the married.
35. Ayaka go back to Canada and she didn't change her idea.
36. Jack's friend is Maria who is a Canadian women.
37. Bothe Jack and Maria are good friend of Ayaka.
38. Maria and her all frieds helped Ayaka and Jack since they planed marry.
39. Ayaka mother accept the married and her mother will attend the wedding, but her father won't.
40. Ayaka and Jack have a married.
41. The end.